On Jane

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JANE, with lengthy blonde hair, enters. Attractive in an effortless way, she carries an alluring and yet forward charm behind a bold smile.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros) February 11, 2016

She turns and we see her face for the first time. This is the very beautiful, very troubled JANE.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros) February 10, 2016

Behind a steamy shower door is the indistinguishable but sexy silhouette of JANE showering.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros) February 10, 2016

All heads turn to find JANE (28) in the doorway: stunning and trying her best to hide it.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros) February 10, 2016

Like draping the Venus De Milo in a burlap dress, Jane’s sensational natural beauty fights through her plain blue Ann Taylor outfit.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros) February 10, 2016

With the popularity of this new feed's listing of the introductions of female characters in scripts, I decided to look at my current draft of a script and see how well I'm doing in comparison....:

Seventeen-year-old JANE¹ is standing against it, looking at the camera. She is thinnish and tallish, the child of a black mother and a Cambodian father. She is dressed in jeans and a tshirt. The tshirt has a drawing of Emma Smith and the caption UR MORMON CHICK. Even though it is clearly cold outside, she seems hot, as if she's been carrying boxes.

JANE² at first seems to be the typical teen-movie perfect blond. She is seventeen, thin and wearing a 50s-style dress in a fascinating modern print; her hair is long and, like everything about her, kempt. Yet on closer examination, she'll prove to be a nerd, not a trophy, and her face will more emotive than beautiful. She, like the other two, is carrying a coat or other warm clothing to put on over what she's wearing.

JANE³ is built for strength. She looks like she could maybe make her high school's football team. She is dressed well, but it doesn't look like it was her idea.

JANE⁴ is heavy but wears her weight with confidence--she clearly thinks of herself as voluptuous rather than fat. She is dressed well, and means it, but unlike JANE² who provides an aesthetic to be seen from afar, JANE⁴'s appearance is more a dare to come closer. She's a year older than the other three girls but could pass as a decade older if she wanted.

JANE⁵ is tall. Her hair is long and unstraightened. She's obviously tired after a long day but her demeanor suggests she's used to running at full charge.

JANE⁶ seems young to have grown children, yet she does. She dresses in an aggressively 50s-housewife fashion, but these dresses do not completely cover the tattoos on her upper arms, legs, chest, back. Her demeanor is so conservative it feels radical.

JANE⁷ is working at her desk.

JANE⁸, a blond girl who looks like the new-and-improved Stepford-student non-hipster version of JANE² is standing beside JANE³, unexpectedly, as in a horror movie.

JANE⁹ is JANE²'s older sister. She is a stay-at-home mom and, while dressed up, looks exhausted.

JANE¹⁰ is obviously trying to be the town badass.

Hmmmm. I'll let you tell me how I did, but I'll tell you what it makes me feel: sad I'm not spending more time with them. But scripts are hard to prioritize when the money ain't comin' through.